Sunday, November 3, 2013

Day 3. NaNoWriMo and NaBloPoMo

This is a continuation from yesterday.  If you would like to read the complete piece in one page, here is the link.

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Joan sighed.  There was no arguing with her and in any event her next appointment had started  thirty seconds ago.  She glanced casually at the green light emanating from her bag.  It dimmed slowly and grew brighter with every cycle, reminding her how late she was becoming.  She felt the humidity of the room increase.  “They must have shut the air conditioning off now that the meeting is over,” she thought.  How cheap.

The hair on the back of her neck started to stick with sweat.  She ran her hand upwards to smear the wayward strands against the sections that were still up.  She thought about leaving the room without saying goodbye.  It seemed like it was going to be unavoidably awkward no matter what she did,  so she just left. 

Down the hallway she could see a row of floor lights.  Everyone else had made it to their appointments on time.  Her dark light was like a missing tooth in a mouth full of cheap carpet.  She stopped to fill her mug up with water.  She couldn’t start a session now.  She needed time to cool down, to prepare herself.

However, sipping water in the hallway was a great way to ensure Ms. Foster would appear, so she made her way to her office.  Once she shut the door behind her, the interior lights warmed and dimmed.  She sat down in her chair and swiveled around a bit, as if the three by three space could somehow become improved if she approached it from another angle.  She caught a glimpse of her reflection in the glass barrier between her and the client area.  The combination of the poor lighting and the monochromatic décor gave her reflection the appearance of an etching.  Crafted only in contrast, she looked much older. 


“They probably do that on purpose,” she thought, “so that we want to bring in the client as soon as we sit down.”  if they did, it was one of the few things they ever planned correctly.  She hit the large button hidden behind a generic picture of somebody else’s cat that she kept on her desk to “humanize her” and waited for the client to appear.

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5 comments:

  1. I went back and read everything so far…and I LOVE the opening chin and hair line. I'm also loving where you choose to pause at each post.

    Question: Is this a work in progress, or is it a final revision? And in either case, are you looking for specific types of comments? As your yeah write rowmate, I'm going to do my best to be regular!

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    1. Thanks, rowmie! This is totally a work in progress. I am writing it currently. I will be in revisions over Winter break, hopefully. Right now I am just trying to keep the story compelling enough to make it interesting enough for me to keep writing it and for a few people to enjoy reading it.

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  2. I love that this is how you're tackling both. Wish I was that put together!

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    1. Oh my. Don't let me fool you--I'm not anywhere close to being put together!

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  3. This is a really interesting piece!!! You sucked me in!!!! Coming over from YeahWrite---we are column mates!!! :-) Definitely will be stopping back to see what else you have to say!

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I love comments. They make me feel like I'm not talking to myself. I try to reply to all of them, eventually.